Turntable by [livejournal.com profile] deirdre_c for <user site="livejournal.com" user="h

Apr. 10th, 2014 11:59 pm
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Title: Turntable
Pairing: Jared/Jensen
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: violence


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“Hey, Jensen, hi.” Jared’s got a coffee to-go in one hand, the other stuffed in the pocket of his shapeless gray hoodie. He hovers by the chair across from Jensen, shifting from foot to foot, like choosing to sit is the most important decision of his day. Jensen knows from experience he won’t.

“Everything alright?” Jensen’s aware everything’s fine, but he’s only got so many conversation starters.

"Yeah.” Jared’s voice is low. He’s looking down, smiling. He’s a tall kid, but how he carries himself—deferentially, drawing inward—makes him seem slighter. “How come you never hang out at The Turntable anymore?"

Jensen glances through the coffee house’s giant plate-glass window at Jared’s record store across the street. Because it’s even more boring over there than it is here.

“Giving you some space. Don’t wanna drive away any customers.” Not that there ever are any. Who even buys vinyl anymore? Ageing Baby Boomers and hipster douchebags?

“Naw. It’s—“ Jared’s practically scuffing his toe on the floor. “It’s nice having you around.”

"You don’t really carry my kind of music." He says it gently. Jared’s nice, even if he’s not Jensen’s type and seriously off-limits. They’re stuck with each other; there’s no reason to be an asshole.

"You sure? I got some great stuff in my latest shipment. Bet I have something you'd—you'd fall in love with." Jared keeps saying things like that, thinking he’s being subtle. Jensen inwardly rolls his eyes.

Jensen starts to refuse, but his server, Brock, arrives with his third cappuccino.

“Here you are, sir,” he drawls, pointedly ignoring Jared. Now Brock, with his bedroom eyes and pert little ass, he’s someone Jensen can sink his teeth into. And already has. His co-worker Osric, too.

Jared runs a hand through his shaggy hair, a small furrow appearing between his brows. “See you tonight,” he murmurs as he leaves. Jensen simply nods. But he watches, eagle-eyed, until Jared’s safely across the street and back in the record shop.

He sprawls back in his chair and blows across his drink to cool it, certain Brock’s watching.


****



Jared doesn’t work at a record store for the money. When your father is second-in-command of a powerful multi-national drug trafficking, money-laundering, underground gambling syndicate, you don’t need a side job.

But Jared had adamantly and publicly quit, convinced his father to set him up with a fake last name and let him play house. Play record salesmen. Whatever.

Accepting Jensen as protection was the price for The Turntable.

The bitch of it is, Jensen isn’t interested in babysitting. He’d been moving up quickly in the organization, doing favors for the right people, not flinching from getting his hands dirty. But he must’ve fucked up somewhere, because now he’s the personal guardian of the boss’s son. Which might have been a big deal, except said son has decided to retire at the ripe old age of 22. So Jensen’s sidelined, indefinitely.

He automatically status-checks, spies Jared through the window in his retro black glasses and Urban Outfitters scarf, earnestly straightening perfectly straight merchandise.

Jensen sighs.

Their first week, he’d jumped at every car that drove by the storefront too slowly. But he’s started to suspect Jared’s in as much danger here as at a church picnic. So Jensen doesn’t have much to do beyond stare across the street, turn coffee into piss, and have a little fun with some easy baristas.


****



Jensen changes his mind about excitement when a kick to the chest slams him into the store’s wall, knocking the air out of his lungs and an album display to the floor. Only years of street fighting, and luck, get his hands up fast enough to catch his assailant's forearm before the knife makes contact.

Jensen had been woken by a noise from the main shop floor, just a soft click, but it didn’t belong. He sleeps in a cot in the back storeroom for exactly this reason: someone attempting to kidnap—or worse—Padalecki’s son in the night. Jensen’s gotten soft the past couple weeks, but not soft enough to ignore his spider sense. He’d hopped up, grabbed his Glock, flipped the safety, and headed toward the storefront in only his underwear.

His caution hadn’t paid off. The intruder—one of Jones’s goons? maybe Amell’s?—got the jump on him anyway. Jensen hopes like hell the sound of their fight woke Jared, that he’s on his way out a back window, jacking a car and hauling ass back to his dad. Because Jensen’s weapon has been knocked away, and Jensen’s in deep shit.

His assailant presses in, arm across Jensen’s windpipe. The guy's got two inches and forty pounds on him, and Jensen’s wrists are bent back as he fights to keep a precious gap between the blade and his throat.

Jensen gulps for oxygen, but grunts instead as his heel slips and the knife kisses skin. He forces it back, but his arms are quivering, and it’s strange, but last image that pops into his mind is Jared. There was always the chance Jensen would die on the job, but he's gonna be fucking pissed if Jared does on his watch.

Before Jensen can make one last move, a muffled, staccato couplet cuts the silence, pfhht! pfhht! There’s a grunt and a splash of brains and blood; then the guy drops, dragging Jensen with him, two hundred and twenty pounds of dead weight. Jensen yanks free, stumbling to catch himself on the checkout counter. When he looks up, Jared’s framed in the stairwell, naked but for pajama pants riding low on his hips, lowering a SIG with a silencer.

Jared’s eyes sweep the pitch-dark corners of the room as he hurries to steal a look through the front window blinds, while all Jensen can do is lean there, listening to his pulse hammer. Not dead, not dead, I'm not, he's not. Then another load of adrenaline dumps into his system as Jared rounds on him, charging forward and pressing him into the wall again, chest to chest.

Jared stares down, lips pressed together. From a few inches away, his features are startlingly sharp, like someone's chiseled him from marble: high, smooth cheekbones, wide brow, slashes of eyebrows, sharp jaw.

“Goddamn it,” Jared hisses. His mouth covers Jensen’s, licking in ferociously, wetness and heat, fingers of one huge hand gripping Jensen’s skull.

Jensen can’t remember ever tilting up into a kiss before. Surprise freezes him, even as unexpected desire roars along his fight-fueled nerves. Alarms should be screaming in his head because, Jesus, this is Padalecki’s kid, because they could still be in danger, because there’s a corpse cooling not three feet from them, because—

Fuck. There’s a warm scent coming off Jared like brown sugar and bed, and when Jensen feels the hard line of Jared’s cock through whisper-thin fabric, his own stiffens up so fast it hurts. Jensen’s never realized how big Jared truly is, even taller than the guy on the floor, pecs and abs ripped, shoulders like rocks. He can’t believe Jared’s been hiding a body like that all along.

“Hold this,” Jared growls in a voice Jensen’s never heard, slapping his gun into Jensen’s hand, pushing it up against the wall over Jensen’s head, and wrenching Jensen’s other arm up to join it. “You’re covering us. Don’t let go.”

Unimpeded, Jared reaches down to cup Jensen’s dick through his boxers, squeezing just right, one blunt fingernail scraping over the slit. Jensen bucks into the touch. He opens his mouth to demand what the fuck is going on, but Jared covers it with his other hand.

“Here’s how this is going to work,” Jared says. His voice isn’t sweet anymore, isn’t shy or stuttering. It’s smooth as sin. “I figure we have about 15 minutes before that guy’s backup starts getting suspicious. Just enough time for me to fuck you like I’ve wanting to for weeks.”

Beneath Jared’s palm, Jensen’s jaw actually drops. He can’t have heard right. Must’ve hit his head. Or asphyxiated.

“Now,” Jared continues, his fingers bracketing Jensen’s cock, tightening just enough to make Jensen hiss with pleasure, following with hard strokes from the heel of his palm. “You can tell me yes, and I’ll make you come so hard you’ll dream about my dick for years.”

Jared’s touch eases, barely there. Jensen desperately hitches his hips toward pressure again, in vain. “Or you say no,” Jared continues, leaning in to whisper, “and we’re done here.”

Jensen can’t even remember what words are. He simply nods.

Hot and slick, Jared’s tongue laps over the furl of Jensen’s ear. “Good choice.”

Jensen shivers, gripping the gun tighter above his head.

“Suck these.” Jared shoves two fingers into Jensen’s mouth. Jensen’s always—always—the guy giving orders during sex. But he doesn’t even hesitate, spit pooling as Jared’s fingertips rub along his tongue.

“I tried so hard to break free,” Jared murmurs. “New clothes, new persona. But then there you were, every day. So beautiful.” Thrust. “So cocky.” Thrust. “So dangerous. Reminding me of everything I left behind.” Jared's other hand trails across Jensen’s hip, dipping beneath the waistband of Jensen’s boxers and easing them down like it’s his God-given right. “Wanted you so bad.” He slips his hand out of Jensen’s mouth. “I’m done holding back.”

Jensen doesn’t even recognize himself, standing there naked and compliant. Yet when Jared yanks at his thigh, he strains to wrap it around the height of Jared’s waist, nothing to hold onto but the weapon overhead, nothing but Jared’s leg between his keeping him upright. There’s nimble fingers slicking down the wide-open crack of his ass, then the slip of a fingertip into his hole.

Jared presses deep; the sting makes Jensen lean his head back against the wall, eyes shut. He hasn’t bottomed for years, but, god, he wants it now.

Jared’s other hand cups Jensen’s chin firmly. “Look at me.” They lock gazes, Jared’s eyes black in the near-darkness. Long moments staring at Jensen as the second push goes deeper, Jared’s finger slotting in right to the knuckle. He starts to stroke, leisurely in and out.

“You’ve been watching me? Well, I’ve been watching you.” Jared’s voice is gorgeous, deep; Jensen gasps, breathes it in like air. “Watching you flirt. Watching you take Brock out back to have him hanging off your dick. Imagined you spread for me like that.”

Jared pulls out and spins them around. He sweeps his arm to clear the counter, scattering sale items—gum and candy, novelty guitar picks, tiny bottles of hand lotion. Lighting-quick, Jared snatches the last bottle of before it topples after the others. Then he presses Jensen chest-down on the cold surface. Goosebumps skitter over Jensen’s skin, his cock bobs cruelly in thin air. Somehow he’s still got hold of the SIG, aims it in the door’s direction, but right now he couldn’t hit an enemy lit by a spotlight. All he knows is Jared.

Jared's palms spread him open, and he feels the cold dribble of lotion over his entrance. Then there’s more, soothing slickness, Jared working fingerfuls up into him, quick and messy. Jensen moans, then mewls, because Jared’s hitting his prostate at an erratic tempo, constantly catching him off-guard with searing bolts of pleasure as he’s stretched a little bit further every time.

He finally finds his voice, enough to croak out, "C’mon. C’mon, it's enough, just get in me."

Jared shoves his pants down and lines up, thank god. There’s blunt pressure, which swiftly turns into white hot burn. Jensen writhes as Jared plunges in, a heavy, insane wedge splitting him apart. He jerks again at the clash of pain and pleasure as Jared fits his hand perfectly around his aching erection, the other steadying his hip.

“Shhh.” He feels Jared’s breath on his nape. “Let go. Open up so nice for me. Yeah. That’s right.” A slow draw, then an easier thrust skates over Jensen's prostate, not even searching for it, just homing in on it like it’s his to find. Jensen’s muscles clench helplessly around Jared’s dick as he works his hips, pounding relentlessly now, driving wounded sounds out of them both. Jensen grips the gun, head down on his forearms, his body shaking, his cock hot iron in Jared’s fist.

“Please, Jared, fuck, fuck,” Jensen stutters, not even sure what he needs.

Then a spot on his neck flares as Jared leans farther, mouths over the shallow knife wound, scraping it with his teeth. Jensen shatters, orgasm punching out of him. White prickles burst behind his eyelids, along each nerve, as he sprays the counter with jizz, every muscle in his body locking up, arching against Jared’s.

Jared's fingers are digging into Jensen’s hipbone, grinding, lodging his cock as deep as it can go as he shoots his load, too. Jensen imagines it—thick and sticky, creaming up his insides—and groans.

They lie there, joined together, Jared’s body hot and sweat-damp as it slumps against Jensen. Jensen’s brain barely has time to reboot before Jared gasps out, “We have a safehouse?"

Jensen nods, gaze snapping to the unguarded door, wincing as Jared’s cock drags out of him. Jared lifts him upright, steadies him until he’s balanced, and he flushes hot again at how easily Jared hauls him around.

“Get clothes, whatever you need,” Jared orders. “I’ll meet you by the back door in two.” He scans the room again, not even pausing over the body but lingering on the rows of record bins. Regret radiates off him, that familiar furrow between his brows, and damn if Jensen’s not tempted to put a hand on his shoulder in comfort. But then Jared darts away, taking the stairs three-at-a-time.

Jensen’s suddenly aware of the blistering spark of soreness in his ass, the filthy slide of come and lotion leaking out of him. He scoops up his boxers, uses them to start cleaning up best he can as he hurries toward the storeroom.

It’s going to be a long ride.


****



Back-to-back, they burst out the door and sprint toward the car parked in the alley. Jensen double-checks the backseat before he shoves Jared in, just in time as shots ring from the shop’s rooftop. He throws himself behind the wheel and peals out, away. A low whumf sounds and a glow appears in the back windshield as the timer Jensen set on the shop’s booby-trapped gas main goes off. Driving carefully to avoid the attention of the emergency vehicles screaming the other direction, Jensen exits the little suburb, then puts the pedal to the floor.

He looks at Jared out of the corner of his eye, not sure where they stand.

“Next time, maybe I should open a sex shop instead?” Jared says, not a bit of shy awkwardness in his smirk.

“Just make sure there’s coffee,” Jensen rasps, voice still wrecked.

Because Jensen will definitely be there, wherever Jared goes. After all, it’s his job to take care of him, isn’t it?
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Date: 2014-04-10 07:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] keep-waking-up.livejournal.com
Ooooh, this was awesome. I love how all the shyness and awkwardness just dropped away from Jared. I love how Jensen fucked other people, even though he was totally head-over-heels for Jensen. I love how they fucked before escaping, like it was some kind of rush or something.

I would also love to see them open up a sex shop! :D

Date: 2014-04-24 12:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Oh man, thank you so much for the fantastic comments! It was difficult with such a restrictive word count to try to make the transition from pretend-sweetheart!Jared to real-badass!Jared make sense, so it's wonderful to hear that it worked for you. And you know that if they did open a sex shop, Jared would enjoy regularly ordering really kinky merchandise just to see if he could… um.. get a rise out of Jensen. ;D

Date: 2014-04-10 07:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ashtraythief.livejournal.com
Oh yes. All the yes in the world! Loved the set-up and Jared trying to keep with his new persona until he just hulks out on Jensen and guh. So hot. So so so hot.Really. Hot. *brainmelt*

Date: 2014-04-24 12:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
*flails* Thank you SO MUCH! I'm thrilled to hear that you liked it. Can't you just imagine poor (heh) Jared, trying so hard to reinvent himself and turn his back on everything in his bad old life, but just when he thinks he might get away, he's saddled with the incredible temptation of JENSEN, tormenting him every day with swagger and deliciousness, luring Jared back into trouble. Honestly, who could resist?

Date: 2014-04-10 07:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kinkajou.livejournal.com
hhhnnghhhhhh.... where did all the oxygen go? *hyperventillates* so damn not!

Date: 2014-04-24 12:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
*fans you* Thank you so much!! \o/

Date: 2014-04-10 07:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] homo-pink.livejournal.com
what in the actual fuck did i do in a past life to deserve such gorgeousness? i hardly even know what to say right now. you took my little record store prompt and spun it into fucking gold and covered it in diamonds. wow, just fucking wow. right from the very get go, i was hooked. pining jared in his baggy hoodie, and asshole jensen brushing him off. and then this bit Bet I have something you'd—you'd fall in love with., i probably read that 20x before i moved on to the next sentence. and i was in love already with your set up, soaking it in. hipster!jared and his record shop across the street...

and then the next scene we find out just who the hell jared is, such powerful connections, a prince of the crime world and jensen as his direct bodyguard. oh my fucking shit. hands covering my mouth, huge huge eyes, the whole thing. and every word from there on out had me happier and happier. jensen in his underwear holding a gun. jared in his pajamas killing a guy and being completely unremorseful about it. and then them fucking right there next to the body. do you live in my heart? you must. because everything i love, you wrote. jared licking at the wound. jensen still trying to aim the gun at the door while he was being fucked. huge, manhandling jared. jensen not bottoming for anyone else........

and. jared in glasses. my fucking weakness. how. how did you do this? and in so few words, a whole entire world and people i want to know everything everything about; their backstories, the future, jensen's first day on the job, just all of it. and your little details - like the guitar picks, and urban outfitters. and jared just swiping all that stuff off the counter and putting jensen down on it. and his regret over losing his little record shop ♥ ♥

thank you so so so so incredibly much for this. it's made my entire day. if i don't already know you, i really want to after this. your writing is ridiculously amazing.

(oh! and the title. so perfect. and clever, too! the record shop and what actually happens. fucking role reversal in the blink of an eye and so goddamn good. yessss)
Edited Date: 2014-04-10 11:58 pm (UTC)

Date: 2014-04-24 12:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Yeah, you know me!

And, aghh, you have no idea how happy your feedback made me. As in, take how much happiness reading the story gave you and multiply that by 10!!! The whole idea for the story started with the image of a dead body in the record store (I mean, the fic was for you, right?) so I love that you picked that element out as one of your favorites. The fact that they fucked right next to it was just bonus. ;D

And there is SO MUCH backstory (and future adventures) about them in my head. I think by the time I turned this story in I was dreaming about them and all their push-pull snarkiness and clash for dominance. Because as much as Jensen loved rolling right over for Jared that night, that's not who Jensen thinks he is, and it takes Jared some effort to convince him. (Plus there's more and bigger threats coming their way as Jared gets entangled one of his older brother's deals-gone-wrong and all of Jensen's protective instincts and skills are put to the test.) So… um… yeah. I FEEL YOU ON THE WHOLE WORLD THING. /o\

And I'm so glad you caught on to the title meaning. For the longest time I couldn't think of a name for Jared's shop and then BAM. Yesssssssss.

So anyway, my heart is overflowing with joy (AND RELIEF) that you liked it so much. Writing for you is so rewarding. <333

Date: 2014-04-10 07:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] peepingdru.livejournal.com
NOW THAT is one hell of a way to start my morning!!!!!...<<<<333333333333
Image (http://s1105.photobucket.com/user/peepingdru/media/latest/51859_600_zps932da1cf.gif.html)

Date: 2014-04-24 01:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Hahaha. *blushes at that gif* Jared's back. UNF.

And THANK YOU!

Date: 2014-04-10 08:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ephermeralk.livejournal.com
Wonderful! Loved how your story unraveled, letting us in on the backstory piece by piece!!

Awesome job!

Date: 2014-04-24 01:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!! With only 2.5K to work with, it was a challenge to shoehorn all the necessary backstory in there to make the guys' switcharoo work, so it's fantastic to hear that it all made sense to you. Yay!

Date: 2014-04-10 09:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yohkobennington.livejournal.com
Unf that was seeeexyyy.

Date: 2014-04-24 01:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Wheeee! THANKS!! :)

Date: 2014-04-10 09:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cassiopeia7.livejournal.com
BEAUTIFUL set-up! And all the reversals, from Jared going from sweet-but-shy kid to deadly Terminator to Jensen flipping from protector to protected . . . oh, so awesome.

“Hold this,” Jared growls in a voice Jensen’s never heard, slapping his gun into Jensen’s hand, pushing it up against the wall over Jensen’s head, and wrenching Jensen’s other arm up to join it. “You’re covering us. Don’t let go.”

And yes, hot. So very, very hot. Who are you, mystery writer? Methinks I need to read more of your stuff, ASAP. :)

Date: 2014-04-25 08:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Hi! I'm me!! And you should come read ALL my stuff. ;D

But seriously, thank you so much for the fantastic comments. I'm so thrilled you liked the story. ♥

Date: 2014-04-11 03:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zubeneschamali.livejournal.com
So very, very hot. Loved the image of Jensen still holding the gun while Jared's bending him over the counter. And suddenly!competent!Jared was definitely a turn-on. ;)

Date: 2014-04-25 08:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
*bounces with joy* THANK YOU, Z!!! \o/

Date: 2014-04-11 03:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alexisjane.livejournal.com
Yowser! Loved that! Oooo I want more of this!! Just so good but...

not even searching for it, just homing in on it like it’s his to find

...fucking floored me!

Just fab! x

Date: 2014-04-25 08:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Ahhhh. Thank you so much. I can't tell you how much I appreciate the lovely feedback. ♥

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Date: 2014-04-11 10:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] reggie11.livejournal.com
Sensational! I loved the sudden role reversal with Jared going all alpha male on Jensen. From sweet and unassuming to fucking deadly...and then some deadly fucking. And I adored how Jared put Jensen (who was a bit of an asshole) in his place, ass up on the counter \o/ Jensen holding the gun while spread across the counter was priceless.

The play of words for the title was genius!
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Date: 2014-04-25 08:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
fucking deadly...and then some deadly fucking Hahahaa! YES!! LOVE IT!!

I'm so glad to hear all the things you liked, especially that image of Jensen. Mmmmm.

And it's also great that you caught the meaning in the title. I have to admit doing a little fist pump when that thought came to me. :D

Thanks for the kind words. ♥

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Date: 2014-04-11 11:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stripytights.livejournal.com
This was amazing - hot, fun and I love your competent Jared seizing the moment and turning everything upside down, and all the little touches to it. Well paced and really enjoyable.

Date: 2014-04-25 08:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Oh thank you so much! The worst for me in this challenge is fitting everything I want to say into 2500 words, so I'm so happy to hear that the pacing worked for you. YAY!

Date: 2014-04-11 11:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alycat.livejournal.com
Well hot damn, that was awesome. Jeeesus, the obvious violence and danger, the roughness of it all. So gritty and desperate and needy and just..yeah. I liked. I liked a lot!.

Date: 2014-04-25 08:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
*happiness* Thank you so much!! I had a ball writing it, and it's so great to hear that you liked reading. ♥

Date: 2014-04-11 12:24 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] big-heart-june.livejournal.com
Jesus fuck. I don't even know what to do with myself. ohman, organized crime and fucking contract killers...SUCH A WEAKNESS!!! your writing is fucking FANTASTIC. I can't even. seriously. can't wait for reveals ♥

Date: 2014-04-25 08:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
*dances all around the room once more*

FAVORITE COMMENTS ARE FAVORITE!!! ♥_♥

Date: 2014-04-11 02:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] firesign10.livejournal.com
Jesus Christ, this was so fantastic. Wow. the tension, the sleepy beginning/fake-out, Jared taking charge (shiver) yeah!!!!! Hot and slick, just like Jensen's ass ;-) My plea -- revisit these two!! (sex shop??? *dies*)

Date: 2014-04-25 08:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Eeee!! THANK YOU. What fabulous feedback!! And requests for sequels are such a great compliment… I love hearing that you'd like to spend more time with these guys! *_*

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Date: 2014-04-11 02:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wendy.livejournal.com
Jared telling Jensen to hold the gun over his head DID ME IN. Man. Love this. Love pushy!Jared and Jensen asking for coffee and just YES. All of it. YEESSS.

Turntable vs. tables being turned. Brilliant.

WHO ARE YOU.

Date: 2014-04-25 09:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
HI WENDY. I'M ME, OF COURSE. JUST A GIRL SITTING HERE BASKING IN ALL OF YOUR GLORIOUS FEEDBACK. ♥_♥

(The coffee thing was for you and Ti, btw. It's Jensen canon for me, now. In every 'verse.)

Date: 2014-04-11 02:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dugindeep.livejournal.com
Oh holy hell that was fantastic. The word choices evoked great tension within me and then I was wrung out with the sex RIGHT THERE. I would die to read more of this set-up.

Date: 2014-04-25 09:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Yay! I'm so, so, SO happy that you liked it, bb. I wish I had more for you RIGHT NOW! But I don't, so just take my love instead. <333

Date: 2014-04-11 05:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cleflink.livejournal.com
“Hold this,” Jared growls in a voice Jensen’s never heard, slapping his gun into Jensen’s hand, pushing it up against the wall over Jensen’s head, and wrenching Jensen’s other arm up to join it. “You’re covering us. Don’t let go.”

UNF. Toppy, bossy Jared is one of my favourite things, especially when he's making Jensen want it so bad he's gagging for it. I love the contrast between Jared the awkward record store owner, and Jared the confident son of a mafia family.

Date: 2014-04-25 11:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Oh, thank you so much!! I always have so much fun living in the head of my non-POV character, in this case imagining all the frustration and effort Jared was putting in trying to adhere to his new cover, determined to be a better, less aggressive, nicer guy than he was raised to be. But in the end, Jensen just made him burst all his seams. (Particularly Jensen in danger on his behalf. FUCK THAT. *bullet to the brain*) :DDD

Date: 2014-04-11 06:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thestarkat.livejournal.com
Delicious! So much depth and backstory in such a short piece and turning all the expectations upside down. Wonderful job!

Date: 2014-04-25 11:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Wow. Thank you so much! ♥ It's so wonderful to hear that the backstory in my head shows through! I'm so glad you liked it.

Date: 2014-04-11 08:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fiercelynormal.livejournal.com
YES. This was so incredibly hot, especially the moment Jared flips over from shy and awkward to totally in control and hooooot. Absolutely loved this!!

Date: 2014-04-25 11:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Heh. Jared was all, "Play it cool, play it cool... SCREW THIS, I'M TAKING WHAT I WANT." :DDD

And Jensen loved it. The end.

Thank you so much, bb. <333

Date: 2014-04-12 12:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] blackrabbit42.livejournal.com
Oooo. I have a guess as to who this author is. I just happened to read another of her stories, and was noticing a "tell" for her style, and then read this immediately after, and boom, there it is. I notice she hasn't commented on this....

Whether I'm right or not, unf. Sooooooo hot.

:)

Date: 2014-04-26 12:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Oh my gosh, you have no idea the TEMPTATION I felt when I saw this comment to reveal myself just to hear you tell me if you guessed correctly and, if so, WHAT GAVE ME AWAY!?!

Was it me, was it me you were thinking of? *chinhands*

♥_♥

Date: 2014-04-12 08:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] akintay.livejournal.com
Wonderful fic and so hot! I love how Jared went from shy and adorable to totally badass <333

Date: 2014-04-26 12:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Aww, thank you so much. ♥ Jared was trying so very hard to be good, but a tiger cannot change his stripes! :D

Date: 2014-04-12 03:42 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] viviansface.livejournal.com
I want to live in this fic/world because it is too damn perfect. AH. ♥

Date: 2014-04-26 12:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Wheeee! THANK YOU SO MUCH!! I am thrilled to hear that you liked it. *twirls*

Date: 2014-04-12 04:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] somersault-j.livejournal.com
HOLY FUCKING JESUS!!! This was beyond perfect and adorable and freaking hot. Loved how Jensen was so bored in the beginning, and then being totally dumbstruck by Jared's toppiness. And Jared slapping the gun into Jensen's hand and manhandling and freaking awesome. Loved it :D

Date: 2014-04-26 11:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
Oh thank you, thank you!! I'm thrilled you liked it. And can there ever be enough manhandling? I think not! :D

Date: 2014-04-12 05:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] adameyezd.livejournal.com

This was soooo good. Such great elements: mobster Jensen, protecting seemingly-shy Jared, then the turning-the-tables & an AWESOMELY hot Jared against an "awed" Jensen, with a perfect ending!

I've read a lot of the stories here in this spnspringfling community & they've all been so good. I wish we could know the authors' names.

To the author of this fic - great job & I wish you would consider a sequel.

Thank you for writing this!

Date: 2014-04-26 11:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deirdre-c.livejournal.com
*joy* Thank you for the lovely comments. It's wonderful to hear all the things you liked abut the story. And now you know all of our names! :D

Although I cannot promise a sequel (although never say never!), I appreciate the sentiment so much, because it means you like these characters enough to want to spend more time with them. How awesome!
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